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Star Trek Arizona
« on: 30 April 2009 03:04 AM »
hay everyone i was suprised to see a forum dedicated to story writers so i am posting a topic about my'n now be warned i am bad at spelling and grammer as you proably have guessed but still just please forgive me and lets move on

Star trek Arizona takes place 2 years after Nemesis the borg have been geting Bolder with Every move Defiants Sovereigns and everything else star-fleet has just is not cuting it So a new Class is desgined and rushed into Production they are the America Class Battleships Full on Battleships (yes i know "That IS NOT SOMETHING STAR-FLEET WOULD BUILD) however they are not solely for war they are also equiped to be adaptable to any stuation that is presented to them this story is about the secont of the 50 the USS Arizona (i will post more later)

Post Merge: 30 April 2009 08:06 PM
Oh writers note i Named her the Arizona for a Spcific Resion i think the US Navy was Wrong not to name another ship USS Arizona because it just showed the Japanese Yea they can kill her while i know that the US navy was more concerned of telling the japanese that they can't kill the US and not worry about some battleship that had nothing to do with the US other than she was named after a state but still i belive it was worng the Real USS Arizona needs a Fiting Tribute to her Legacy so i had that on my mind Dec 7 2007 when i first invisoned her she was a Arizona class but a friend of my'n said someone made a ship mod for Bridge commander that was Arizona Class so i changed it to America Class plus i thought that fit better i mean fighting the borg is about shoing them Resitance is Not Futile and that is what the US had had to show throught its history now i know this is probably sounding vary Fat headed to anyone from another contry reading this But it is true more about the ship will be posted in the ship desgin forum i just have to scan in my Scetches of it first 

Post Merge: 30 April 2009 10:37 PM
ok here is the Prologue Excuse spelling and grammer plaese :startrek016: :startrek016: :startrek016:

Star TreK
Arizona

Prologe
in a dark room on some planet sits a figure at a desk another figure walks in and up to the desk. a strange symble of some powerfull Culture on the wall behind the desk.
"What is it that is so IMPORTANT to Disturb Me!?!" the figure behind the desk Grows.
"Sir The Targets weapon...It will be compleat soon if we want to win we have to strike now." the other one Nurvously says.
"How long...In Target Time." the first asks.
"Two Months."
"I will assemble the Councle." the first says waving his hand to tell the secont to leave.
"BUT SIR...The councle takes to long It will be compleat and we will lose the chance We must Forget the Coun...No PLEASE AHH NO." he clutches his head as if pleaged by a headach. the first had his hand plam outstreched to the secounts head.
"The Councle Will not be DEFIDE!..." The first roars. "They have More power than even Me And you know all to well what will happen if they find out you wanted to defy them." the first adds lowering his hand the secont stops grasping his head.
"Good However i hear your fears i will Use all Expedincy to summan them." he then pushes a butten on his desk
"COUNCLE OF THE ELEMENTOIDS MEET IN A MILLICON" the firsts voice booms over some form of an intercomm
"A Millicon But sir That is equile to exactly 2 Months in target time....NO." he puts his hands up to his head as the first turns around and looks to be rasing a hand to the seconts head again
"Do i need to punish you Again Spy master" the first says
"No I Understand and will obay Lord Shinzon the Third." the secont groans


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Chapter 1
Uss Monitor
Nebula Class Starship NCC-61826
Earth Orbit
Stardate 66124.9


A old Nebula Class ship flys serinly over earth she obvously has not had any of the refits that the others got except for the one when the dominion war broke out inside 5 of her command crew sits in the confernice room waiting for an admiral, for some resion he is handing out the new orders
"what ever admiral comes to a starship to hand out new orders to her crew members must be a Unapreciated Admiral cuse i tell you that is not a job for an admiral." said Commander Kirt Gartner the 10th his was one of the longest family lines
next to him was Captain Ron White even though he was named after a famous Comeadian he was far from being even remotly funny though he tryed but only when he was drunk
"Now, Now Kirt This admiral is a bit different from the rest aprently he wanted to do this for good resion and you will find that out in a bit" he said the good captain had been a captain since the days of Enterprise C He was offered her but Being as humble as he was he declined it saying he was not a good enough captain to join the ranks of thoes famous enough to command a Enterprise a few weeks later he found out that was a smart move because C was lost Defending the Klingons from romulan attack
"Well i hope We are all going to the same ship it would be ashame to brake up such a good team" the Cheife Medical Officer Commander Arizhel Stormrunner said, she was alwase and oddball through the acadmay and through her career as she is half klingon and in the medical feild
the other two noded their heads in agreement one the Secount officer Chife of Security and tactical Lt. Commander Matthew Smith and one of kirts best friends they even looked through their family records and found that their great Times 10 Ancestors Where best friends and lived down the road from each other.
the other did not want to know what his family line was or else he would have found that he had ties to kirts family to Lt.commander Scott Capps the Chefe Engineer pefered to be called by his last name because he was tiered of the joke that pops up concering old Montgomery Scott the CE of the old Constition Enterprise
"i hate to see this old girl go but Star-fleet Engeneering dept. Tells me There is no way to upgrade her she missed to many Refits because she was on REALY Deep space assignment" Capps Said the Monitor was set to be retired A head of secgule to the other Nebulas because she was not compadible with any modifcations star-fleet tryed on her
"yea but anyway i just hope the new assignment for us is not some Frighter" Matt put in he had been worrying about that ever since the monitor was ERGANTLY called back to earth Off her Deliceat Mission because of the admiral handing out the assignments
"Well what ever it is Star-fleet is not giving me a choice..." the captain said "they are making me take this one" he finished
"With good resion" a voice said a admiral walked in to Kirt and Matt he was all to familer Patrick Horton he used to be the tactical officer on monitor with the other two but jumped commander and got promoted to captain a year or so back and was not heard from since but kirt and matt would wait after the meeting to talk to him as the three of them are close friends
"i talked star-fleet out of braking you guys up so now Your new assignments are all the same ship though i can't tell you anything about her just yet as she is still clasified Beyond Top Secret..." he said handing Padds to the group
"I know these Courdince" Capps Exclamed he used to be a helmsman untill the untimly death of his preadicesor "its Nebula TU-571"
"Yes Your right see the Nebula is T class hence the T in the name she is big enough to hide a fleet of ships and blocks sensors from the outside which makes it perfect to build ships intere" admiral Horton said "i will be staying abord while you take the Monitor to the nebula There your Replacments will take command once you transfer to the new ship...by the way Matt It is not a Frighter" he said and as he finished talking a look of relife came over matts face everyone saw it
"Come on Matt..." Kirt said Starting to rag on his old friend "we are like one of the most decorated Crews Ever in starfleet history do you realy think they would Put us on a Frighter?!?" the whole group chukled at that excapt for matt who jokingly punched kirt in the arm
"well thats All Meeting over" said Patrick as he reatching up and pulled off his Comm badge and put it on the table while Lt.Commander Capps Commander Stormrunner and Cpatain White said they had to go pack and get ready the other three knew they where just leaving them alone to ceatch up
"You Stupid Son of a [censored]..." kirt yelled to the surprise of the other two " I thought i told you if you left never to come back or contact us yet here you are" Scilence for a few seconts then kirt could not hold back a smile he just about sprints accrosed the room and gets Patrick in a big Hug "DAMN MAN ITS SO GREAT TO SEE YOU AGAIN" kirt yelledso happy to see his old friend again then matt came over and shook Patricks hand while they where friends their as kirt could tell some Animosity between them on what happened a few missions before patrick got promoted
"Its nice to see the both of you again to god i forgot how much i missed this ship untill i looked up in my teliscope at home to see her flying over earth not as beutifull as the Sovereign but Dang near close" he said jokingly
"THE FREAKING SOVEREIGN are you kidding me...no wonder you left" kirt almost shouted this time
"Yea She was great but a new ship just does not have the same personality that this old girl had it great to be back here hay in your quarters kirt does it still..."
"Klank Yeap i had them fix it a few weeks after you left but then i couldn't sleep so i had them put it back don't quite remmber what it was making the noise but oh well Hay lets hit the Holodeck we both just got off duty right before the meeting so yea oh and i have improved just wait" kirt said all excited
"Hes right Pat he has improved Quite a bit infact on some occasions he can even beat me" matt chirped in finaly
"Beat You Oh man Now i have to find out Dang i remmber it so lopsided i could beat both you and kirt you could beat kirt and kirt could not beat eather of us" pat said Chuckling
"Oh and i modded it" kirt said using an old Video gaming Term that his Ansetor used
"Realy to what"
"i just updated the ships is all"
"Oh come on kirt Don't lie to an Admiral..." Matt said Laughing "He made it so NO one could Beat him Its imposible Even for a Vulcan a Klingon and a Romulan all working together at it by making a ship of his own"
"I think you guys will espicaly like your new assignment if that ship he created in the Game is the same one that he has been working on since the Acadmy"
and with that the admiral picked up his commbadge and walked out with his old friends to the holodeck to play the old Stratagy Game that had Goten Patrick his Captains Command in the first place
when they got to the holodeck kirt rushed to the control pad on the wall
"Computer Load Program Star-Fleet Legacy, Standerd Tournament of 16 People Minus three thoes three being myself Admiral Horton and Lt.Commander Smith" he said
"Enter when ready"the computer chirped after it loaded the program the staium it loaded look almost klingon-ish with a full Crowd ready for the action to start standing in a semi-circal around a Octigon shaped table where a few humans a Klingon a Vulacan and a Ferengi the three took their places and the program started
"WELCOME EVERONE TO STARFLEET LEGACY" an human anouncer shouted into a mike "today we have a returning Vetren of Legacy Admiral Patrick Horton" the Crowd went Beserke the anoucer conteued to explain the game for new comers
"the game is simple two players pick a race from the Era of pre Federation Captain Jonathan Archer all the way to Captain Jean-Luc-Picard and Todays ships each player has a starbase to conduck their Resurce Resouce Gathering and Ship building the palyer who destroyes the others Starbase wins and we have a suprise today" the anouncer said
"What Oh god No not today" kirt moaned "the computer adds sertain numbers to make it more intersting i changed it so that it more relistic" he wispered to patrick matt knew so kirt was not worryed about him hearing but matt turned to kirt anyway
"I thought you revered it" he whispered
"i did but i loaded the one i did not revert" he said
"You kept this one after it pissed the BOTH of us off So Much that we both Refused to play again untill you fixed it" said Matt Vary angrly
"i thought it would come in handy someday anyhow im shure it wount be That bad" he said in defence
"We have Added Two more Compeaditors today One you know from History Books hes Blue But hes Still Vary lean Mean And Shall we Say Green Here He is SHRAN The Andorian" and with that a Andorian with cloathing from the Pre Starfleet Era Came Walking out however He had only One Antena the other was a Nub "The Other is A Sneeky Triky Member of a Race that was Untill just Recintly Our Mortal Enamy Give a Nice AND I MEAN NICE Welcome To Dhael Lhoell The Romulan"
and Vary Attractive Young Romulan woman about the same age one might geuss as Commander Donatra durring the whole Shinzon Affare came out and took her place next to shran who had taken his place next to the Ferengi who was actualy a woman was Named Tranix and she was quite formidable next to her was the Klingon K'temock then the Vulacn Another Female her name was T'Rec she mas not as attractive as the romulan and Much, Much older then came the random human Charicter who Kirt and the others Did not even bother rembering their names
"So Lets start the first Match It Will Be Commander Gartner Verses Shran" as the two steped up patrick leaned over to mat
"Hay are the matches still decided by the skill level the computer gives you from past matches" he whispered as the match started nuthing was going on realy at that point except for the two players sending out their Mining ships and star recerching the Tech needed to build their Fleets
"Yea" Matt wispered back watching intently
"But is this the first time You have Seen Shran" patrick asked woundering
"First time I have Seen him but kirt may have been useing this one as a traing program" he said back "By the way Shran is playing i'd say he is as skilled as Tranix And you know how She is even on the Best of days" he added
"No...No i don't You guys Gave the AI Personalitys" Patrick sounded Agased
"Oh i forgot you left before the three of us had the chance to try it out that was the good news kirt tryed to tell you while you where packing that day"
"Ahh Ok how did he do it" he asked
"I don't know actualy probably just threw in all of what the Federation Knows about how the races act" Matt as a little anoyed patrick then remmbered Matt liked to watch the matches indeapth to figure out what new tricks each on had
they seamed vary well even and matched as shran who knew that the Andorian ships stode No chance even by todays standereds of beating the feds even if the feds where out numbered 30 to 1 the andoirans would get blown sky high so he was useing the Federation kirt had seemed to revert to his old tactic of Slamming a Huge force head on and it looked like that failed but just as shrans ship reached kirts starbase Shran noticed Ships comeing out of a Nebula right Near his star base it was a secount force of kirts and before shran could get his ships back for a defence kirt had shrans starbase turned to Space dust
"AND WE HAVE A WINNER FOR ROUND ONE COMMANDER KIRT GARTNER" the anoucer shouted into his Mikerphone and as he did the Crowd went Beserke again kirt walked around the table to meet shran for the Costumary handshake
"Nice One Pink skin..." shran said obvously Vary happy with that match even though he lost "You remind me of a Cpatain of your race that i once knew and i respect you just as much as i respected him Thank you for that match Commander"shran finished shaking Kirts hand
"Thank you Shran..." kirt replayed also vary happy "I hope that Antena of yours grows back Real Soon cuse i tell ya its just weird seeing a Andorian with only One antena" shran reached up and Rubed his Nub of an antena with kirt Patrick and even matt new the story behind only to well
"Well i lost it in a honurable Dule Just like this match Again Pink Skin thank you" Shran saidshaking kirts hand agian and walking off to go watch the rest of the turniment from the stands
"Our Next match is a Grudge Match Between Admiral Horton Vs K'temock last time these two faced off patrick Soundly Thrashed This Hounorable Klingon Warrior" the anoucer called out the two steped forword as the reached the Table K'temock spoke
"You INSOLENT Patq You Insulted me Last time We battled then you Ran off afraide of Me No Dubt" the klingon barked Furously
"No Sir i was given a command of my own" patrick replyed
"PHAAA HA HA HA..."the klingon started laughing so hard it looked as if he would fall over but the he looked at Patrick and saw the seriousness in his face "Wha Seriously WHAT IS your Puny Federation Coming to When they Give Cowards Like you Commands of their own What ship" he finaly asked
"The USS Sovereign Ship of the line For Sovereign Class Ships" patrick said Smiling the klingon just stared blankly Agast at what he was hearing as soon as patrick saw that he was woundering to himself Oh [censored] i hope the Holodeck saftys are on Because that must have Been the Wrong thing to say while patrick was exilent at the Self defence hand to hand Fighting he was no match for this klingon who was extreamly Tall for one of his race and Extreamly Well Built but then K'temock started Luaghing
"Well I have to say A sovereign Class ship does have an hounorable Quality to it Cloest the Federation will Ever Get to A Full Sized Battleship Ehh" he luaghed it seamed Patrick patched things up with the towering Hologram the match then started K'temock was of course playing as the Klingon Empire while Patrick was playing as the Federation early on it would seam the K'temock was going to get his revenge as patrick was having to relearn all the controls but just as things looked Bad He came back with a hidden force of Galaxy Sovereign and Defiants inside a neer by nebula to his star base whiping out K'temock's Fleet and before he could build another ship for a defence Patrick had Blown his star base to smithereans leting out a Strong String of Klingon Curses he started to march over to patrick but before he could get to patrick two Oddly Klingon Guards stoped him said something in klingon and walked away
"YOU May have won again But next time You won't Be SO lucky You got me Puny HUMAN PATQ" and with that he stormed off
"Damn and i thought i patched things up with him oh well maybe next time" Patrick said A smile spreading acrosed his face
"THAT WAS AWSOME..." kirt Yelled running over to Pat "...That klingon was geting a REALY fat head because NO ONE Could Beat him Now he will think twice before insulting the rest of us while we play" kirt added
thing at the tournament went on Matt Won his match agansed one of the Random humans kirt had noticed that the Humans seamed to be geting Better at the game because when pat was assigned to Monitor the three of them alwase played a human first and then when they got into the finals did they face the Aleain Players now it was mixing them up soon they will need names he thought then in the Quarter-finals Kirt played Tranix the ferengi how ever their was one ship that No one could ever figure out what tech you needed to build it it was know only as Galaxy X and everyone knows you get a small force of them together it would Equil a full Fleet of Sovereign Defiant and Galaxy Classes still some how the Ferengi Figured out how to Build them as she knew that Ferengi Ships Stood NO cahance as well agansed the Federation so she to used the Federation as did the Vulcan so Kirt had a few Galaxy X ships sent at him and while he lost most of his fleet he imployed a sneeky trick he hid Half his fleet in a Neer by Nebula Something that Alwase appeared on every map to everyones Wounder kirt figured out why this time the nebulas are Minable you can Mine them and have more Credits for Ships and Rescrche and the only way he found this out is he posted a Oberth Class in a Nebula Neerby Tranix's Starbase seeing that each star base had a nebula and he had it scan the starbase and it cought the resurch nessicary to bring about The Galaxy X and while he could not put it to use this match as it was to late in it he would save it for the finals then he scaned the Nebula and found out about the Resource rich nebula he rushed the Oberth back to his base and scaned his Nebula finding samething so he managed to drive off the small fleet of Galaxy X ships quickly replenished his fleet then sent a small wing of Oberths Perigren Fighters and Defiants to lure the Galaxy Xes away from the base she fell for the Bait then Kirt rushed in with Sovereigns Galaxys Defiants And even Excelsiors and started to pound the starbase the galaxy Xes Arived right on time but as they where in a runing fight back to the Starbase They were Worn out and Beat easy picking for the Wing he had used to lure them away in the first place so Tranix lost after the Match she was Madshe did not even take kirts offer of a Handshake she could not even make Coersive Sentences she stormed out of the Arena but did not show up int the stands then Pat faced off with the Vulcan T'Rec and he almost lost again as T'Reck keep Building Renforcment Wings and placing them in her Nebula which no one besides Kirt knew was Resorces finaly Pat won by the Skin of his pants T'Rec's starbase was about to go and Pat had two ships left they where one small phaser burst away from being spacedust and T'Rec was Just about to bring in another Renforcment Wave so Pat sent his Remaing Sovereign away running as fast as it could which was just about 1/4 Impulse he had the Galaxy Channle all its reaming power to the engins and go as fast as it could into T'Rec's starbase and it worked afterword T'Rec came up to Pat gave him the Vulcan Sulute then Shook his hand saying
"That was the most Illogical move i have ever seen but sometimes inorder to be logical you have to be Illogical" and one might say that a smile cracked that Surly Vulcans face though she would Denie that it did
then it was matts turn again how ever he Faced the Romulan Dhael and he lost Dhael just overwelmed him plus their was a ship that was just a rumer untill she brought it out agenst Matt The Reman Scimitar like the Galaxy X No one who tryed playing as romulan could ever figure out how to Unlock it the game showed you What ships you could Unlock just did not tell you what tech you had to resurce and unfortunitly Matt lost to Two Scimitars so it came down to the Semi-finals it was Kirt Pat a human and Dhael the human faced Dhael first and got Absolutly Slotered by this time Everone knew that the Nebulas were Resorces so Dhael managed to build 5 Scimitar's the human stood No chance then it was Kirt and Pats turn
 
« Last Edit: 01 May 2009 06:00 PM by defiantpirate19 »
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Re: Star Trek Arizona
« Reply #1 on: 01 May 2009 07:07 PM »
I really like this so far!  I can't wait to read more!


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Re: Star Trek Arizona
« Reply #2 on: 01 May 2009 08:02 PM »
 Sounds interesting so far...and like Zach says..."I can't wait to read more!" :)
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Re: Star Trek Arizona
« Reply #3 on: 08 May 2009 03:56 PM »
DANG IT i wish sites like this one would NOT sensor peoples writing
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« Reply #4 on: 08 May 2009 05:29 PM »
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Re: Star Trek Arizona
« Reply #5 on: 09 May 2009 01:27 AM »
i know but it seam so Stupid anyway ummmm so i need some advice ok i heard at the end of DS9 Sisko went into the wormhole to live with the Prohits/aleians right well i cinda want him in the story momentaraly its it posible he came back out???
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Re: Star Trek Arizona
« Reply #6 on: 09 May 2009 09:59 AM »
If you read the DS9 Novels - Mission Gamme (1-4), Rising Son, Avatar, Abyss, Worlds of Deep Space Nine (1-4) - Then you would see that yes, Sisko does come back out of the wormhole around the time that Bajor finally joins the Federation (just after the assasination of Shakaar)

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Re: Star Trek Arizona
« Reply #7 on: 11 May 2009 04:18 PM »
If you read the DS9 Novels - Mission Gamme (1-4), Rising Son, Avatar, Abyss, Worlds of Deep Space Nine (1-4) - Then you would see that yes, Sisko does come back out of the wormhole around the time that Bajor finally joins the Federation (just after the assasination of Shakaar)
WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATTTTTT BAJOR WAS NOT A MEMBOR OF THE FEDERATION DURING DS9!?!?! DAMN well anyway What Year in old calender was it when they joined and such because im thinking of seting this story on the old Calender date Dec 7 2381 since the ship is named after The USS Arizona that Sank in Pearl Harbor on Dec 7 1941 440 Years after her sinking her name sake Takes to the Stars but anyway the resion i ask this as well is because im brining the borg in they will be attacking Bajor (Yes i know Why would the Borg attack bajor) because they want control of the Wormhole that way the get a foothold in both Alpha And Gamma Quadrents
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« Reply #8 on: 11 May 2009 07:00 PM »
Ever thought of writing that up in open office or something with a spell check feature? ;) Would make it much easier to read
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« Reply #9 on: 11 May 2009 11:01 PM »
Ever thought of writing that up in open office or something with a spell check feature? ;) Would make it much easier to read
I have been on my dad to Install Word for AGES now but he keeps delaying so i am making do with what i have
the little text thing Yea that is a call out to Warcraft 3 one of the charicters says (if you click on him enough times) "I am The warchife" so i filped it around for my own use